Good,
But,
Needs improvement.. Some mistakes in sentence structure.. Almost all new sentences beginning with no capital letters.. I can't elaborate more, coz short of time.. Just give a second look.. You would understand..
Keep trying.. Good attempt..

'Children have no childhood in Pakistan'



Childhood is a stage of a person's development.It's a period when a child gets specific characters as well as physical and mental strength.It's a very sensitive and beautiful part of life.A proper childhood is that when children are carefree,innocent,playful,active,well cared and protected by parents and society.Unfortunately in Pakistan children are deprived from a joyful childhood.Even they are not getting their basic rights.

The first very basic right is to get sufficient amount of food,a proper balanced diet.In Pakistan, the nutritional status of children is very poor.31% children are underweight due to insufficient amount of food,impurity of eatables,no access to clean drinking water.Such ill-bred children can not live a healthy and active life.Health care situations are also showing a worse picture.Child death rate is 87 per 1000 children.Children become prey of many diseases due to lack of immunity.Pneumonia and Measles are one of the biggest killers of children.A recent ban on polio vaccination can be lethal for Pakistani children.Just after four month of this year 6,000 cases of measles have been reported in Punjab only.These things have put our young generation in graving danger.
State-paid education is the right of every child.It's a tragedy that we have the 3rd largest out of school population of the world and girls are the 75% of this population.Yet money allocated to education in the budget is barely one or two percent of GDP. 3.8 million children between the ages of 5 and 14 are engaged in child labor.
Its really provoking when we see the statistics of crimes against children,child prostitution,kidnapping,physical torture are wide spread phenomena in Pakistan.Many children are serving long terms in prison for minor offences.We also have been failed to stop recruitment of children in militant groups.Most of the suicide bombers are Children(under the age of 18).Children should live a fear free life but in every home throughout the day TV channels are giving the breaking news of bombing,murders.these circumstances are making our young ones mentally sick.
Half of the country's population consisted of children(under the age of 18).A separated ministry should be created for children at provincial level.Government should establish rescue and care centers for children facing abuse.Government should also spend more money on education and health sector. Society and parents should also take steps for betterment of children.Parent's duty is not only to well provide(materially) but they also have to give love,affection and their time to the children.They are the future of Pakistan,if we want to save our country we have to save our children.

good attempt ,but there are few grammatical mistakes in ur expansion

like
Childhood is a (the not a) stage of a person's development

and 13 to 18 year old known as teen agers not child
belw 12 years are known as child

if i am wrong plz correct it

stat blessed

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It is correct to say, Childhood is a stage of a person's development. It means that there are many stages of a person's development, and one of them is childhood. Though we can use 'the' as well.. Both are correct. It depends upon what you want to say..

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my be you are right but here (OF) shows possession thus, i suggested (the )

Quote:

Childhood is a (the not a) stage of a person's development

Stay blessed

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Your suggestion is correct, m not calling it wrong, rather I said that the use of 'a' isn't wrong here ..

And in many sentences, there can be 'of', and it could be showing possession as well, still 'a' would be used, not 'the'.

For example,

1. He is a good friend of mine.
Here this sentence means that I have many friends and he is one of them.

2. It is a leaf of a mulberry tree.
This sentence, like the first one, means that a mulberry tree has many leaves, and it is or may be one of them.

Similarly,
Childhood is a stage of a person's development means that a person's development has many stages and Childhood is one of them.

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"So my birth was the first of all my misfortunes". (Jean Jacques Rosseou)

"Democracy foster mediocrity"

The concept of democracy is bludgeon of people,for the people,by the people.according to Karl Marx "Democracy is road to socialism" which proved to be beneficial for common masses.to get the tyranny instead of introducing it.Democracy proved to be foster the mediocrity which can bring social justice with power of common man.and therefore becomes the utmost need of the modern world to compete the challenges.

Democracy improvised the middle class to take active part in state affairs and and suggest policies according to their own choice through the right of representation to middle man and thus able to run the state successfully.It also proved to be ahead of states where democracy is been criticized and one man is liable to take the decision of public fate.During world wars,it can be observed that those wars were started by non-democratic states but won by group of allies who preferred democracy.

According to Abraham Lincoln "The ballot is stronger than bullet". Democracy is extended day by day in world with an aim to bring prosperity in states.This was result of democracy when a man Dr.ambedkar with oppressed class from India become the law minister of India right after its independence.

On the other hand peoples who criticized this form of govt claims that govt is high art based institute with higher sciences then how can people on larger scale without such knowledge took possession of this institute,by stating that govt is like a kind of ship whose captain possess the good administrative qualities and stupidly give chance or right to non-trainers on such larger scale to navigate the ship,therefore this type of govt is not up to the mark and expectations.

Hence,it is important to foster democracy by mediocrity because one can produce new ideas with the presence of democracy.That's why Sir Winston Churchill said that "Democracy is worst form of govt except all those forms which have tried from time to time.

"The Winds are Always on the Side of the Ablest Navigator"

This proverb tells us an important reality of life, the one which everyone needs to ponder over especially us as a nation. This proverb tells us that the person who has the most ability will be favored by luck. If a person is able, he will make situations work for him even if they appear to go wrong. Others will think that luck is with him, but this is not luck, this is his ability to turn pebbles into gold. That encourages us to strive hard and do not leave anything on fate. This proverb discourages the people who think that unknown forces are controlling their world, who believe so much on luck that do not even try to their full potential.

It is important to note that ability can be innate but most often it comes from knowledge and experience. Knowledge tells us experiences of other persons. Experience tells him more than knowledge when he applies it in real life. He faces different situations and with a learning state of mind, he will sharpen his ability. Life offers us different kinds of tests to check us. This ability will teach him how to tackle these situations. And one who is the ablest will go through all the tests with ease.

Ability is must for any person especially the leaders. The leaders are the one who guides others, their ability will not only affect them but also all those under them. The ablest leaders will help their nations come out of crisis. The ablest commander will make his army fight with courage even when situation appears to be against his army. Our Quaid is a living example. Despite of the fact that British and Hindus both were not willing to allow us to take a homeland, despite of the fact that both were in stronger position than us, it was the ability of our great Quaid that helped us realize our dream. Remember luck also favored him at number of instances but it is because of his ability that luck also decided to support him.

Everyone has been given the ability by Allah (swt) but still many people do not appear quite able. This is because many skills are required to improve your skill and talent. Not many people care to try hard towards fostering their abilities. Therefore, it is imperative that a person should be able to learn from his mistakes and his experiences. That will help him understand the proverb when he practically feels the winds on his side.

Dear
Sorry to say,your paragraph is teeming with mistaks.
Look at the following:
O Sentence structure is very poor.
O The fornothing repitition of the phrase "this proverb tells/encourages" is superfluous and catches redundancy.
O Confusion and absence of uniformity while using pronouns-us,he,one etc.
O Use of passive where active could be used.
O Despite doesn't take "of".
O Deadly repitition of some words like,luck,ability,tell,knowledge etc.

And the list goes on.....

Stay blessed

Dear King Khan, would you please explain the term, "Mediocrity".
What I understand and I can be wrong that "mediocrity" is disapproving and the title: Democracy foster Mediocrity,mirrors demerits/disadvantages/negatives of Democracy.
While you have written all in pro democracy.

Correct me if Iam wrong