Is there any fellow or a teacher who could evaluate my essay? I don't have any proximate access to anywhere to get my essay checked? There are teachers in Lahore who I could send essay, but they are charging too much fee? So, if there's anyone benevolent on this forum, kindly reply as days for exam are impending. Thank you

Though Karachi is an economic hub of Pakistan, most of Custom group officers live here, but we could not find any English teacher who can check our English Essay. I have been searching for a teacher in Karachi for 3 years. Ultimately, my all-hopes have shattered. I could not find any teacher in Karachi who can check my essay.

you can post here.
I have seen ur essays, and it seems that you often select ambiguous topics and try to frame whatever knowledge you have into the interpretation of the topic rather then articulating what the topic really demands.

Withour clarity, one can never pass essay.

Be relevant but at the same time be critical as well.
It is very important as sometime to remain relevant we often fail to critically analyise topic.

Last but not the least, essay should be creation of your own mind,obervation and the life long knowledge that you have gained. Instead of following rigid rules, be innovative but relevant as well. Imagine you are a lawyer or a debator and the given topic is your point of argument or debate which you have to prove. The judge or the jury is your examiner and only by winning the case or competition you can pass essay. Use every convincing argument. Try to create links between facts and the argument that you want to prove.

For example, I want to prove that aim of education really matters. Here I can say that how education systems of Athenians and Spartacas differed with regard to the end result. Spartans education created warriors and Athenian education produced thinkers. Former tought subjects of warfare and physical fitness while the later emphasized on physical strength as well as intellectual grooming by teaching diverse subjects such as mathematics,history,logic and music. Ultimately, Athenians prevailed and became tourchbearers of human progress while the Spartans perished despite having initial success in wars against Athenians. Thus aims of education decide future of a nation.


See how I connected my own knowledge with one point that I wanted to prove? But at the same time, I have also remained relevant as well.

I hope you will do better in essay if you are able to interpret topic and than produce a clear stance backed by concrete but relevant arguments.

Bro, it's too hectic to post 2500 words of essay here. If you know any teacher or civil servant here, kindly refer me to him/her

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You can at least upload outline and introduction part.

Covid-10 has triggered an end to globalisation.

Outlines
1. Introduction
The advent of Covid-19 outbreak has turned globalisation into 'slowbalisation'. The crisis triggered once-in-a-generation threat to globalisation by disrupting income equality, supply chain values and inclusive socio-economic progress. Nonetheless, several globalised efforts were witnessed in the midst of pandemic which require more resilience for sustainable recovery.

2. A glimpse of globalisation in the retrospect
Reflecting on economic and health crisis emerged in the past

3. How has globalisation been impacted during Coronavirus outbreak?
3.1 Income inequality has widened
3.2. Global supply chain has been disrupted
3.3. A contingency of vaccine nationalism being witnessed
3.4. Democracy is seemingly under threat vis-a-vis nationalist-cum-protectionist tendencies
3.5. Public trust in state institutions and international organisations has been eroded

4. These multiple challenges were not without sincere multilateral efforts
4.1. Extension of debt repayments by G20
4.2. Collboration of China with WHO along with other global vaccine alliances
4.3. Virtually-held regional and global summits to for shared vision
4.4. Viviv depiction of exchanging vaccine information and doses

5. A blueprint for pushing multilateralism towards sustainable growth is required to thwart the menace of de-globalisation
5.1. Priority should be given to lives over livelihoods
5.2. Marginalised people should be concentrated on during inoculation drives
5.3. Stem the tide of democracy backsliding towards authortitarianism
5.4. Public-private partenrship is required to compensate the labour strata of global societies
5.5. Digitalisation is the need of the hour to reform the health sector

6. Conclusion

Globalisation, which is the means to ensure inclusive economic and cultural growth, has been deeply undermined in recent times. The advent of a new outbreak- dubbed as 'SARS-Cov-02', has taken a toll of the entire world with regard to socio-political and economic growth. The virus has not only exacerbated challenges of sustainable growth but has also wiped out years of progress made to address health challenges. As a result, the entire economic engine of the world has turned into 'slowbalisation'. Many startling crisis ranging from widening income inequality to politics to nationalism were observed during the ongoin pandemic as a result of which inter-dependent efforts of states for equitable economic growth has been affected. However, despite the crisis battered the entire globe, several propitious actions from world states and organisations were observed to keep interconnected entailing exchange of information regarding covid cases and virtual meetings to share visions in order to upend the crisis through sustainable efforts. The pitfalls that put pushed the global economy back to contraction require greater efforts with a view to accomplishing a better end vis-a-vis sustainable development goals SDGs

Please evaluate and give your valuable feedback.

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The fear of suffering is worse than the suffering itself.

Covid-10 has triggered an end to globalisation.

Outlines
1. Introduction
No clear stance is mentioned whether COVID has triggered an end or not.

2. A glimpse of globalisation
(difficult to interpret for me and can't say anything without the full paragraph)

3. How has globalisation been impacted (impacted or triggered an end?) during Coronavirus outbreak?
3.1 Income inequality has widened ( it is a part of globalisation not COVID)
3.2. Global supply chain has been disrupted ( it occurs number of times during recession)
3.3. A contingency of vaccine nationalism being witnessed (ok. Promotion of national intrest over global)
3.4. Democracy is seemingly under threat vis-a-vis nationalist-cum-protectionist tendencies (ok. deterioration of democratic culture, aspects,...)
3.5. Public trust in state institutions and international organisations has been eroded. (ok)

4. These multiple challenges were not without sincere multilateral efforts
(diversion from the topic. it refers to the unclear stance as mentioned in the introduction)

4.1. Extension of debt repayments by G20
4.2. Collboration of China with WHO along with other global vaccine alliances ( it means gllobalisation- not an end to globalisation?)
4.3. Virtually-held regional and global summits to for shared vision
4.4. Viviv depiction of exchanging vaccine information and doses

5. A blueprint for pushing multilateralism towards sustainable growth is required to thwart the menace of de-globalisation ( wayforwad)
5.1. Priority should be given to lives over livelihoods ( can’t say how it is related to globalisation or deglobalisation)
5.2. Marginalised people should be concentrated on during inoculation drives ( same as stated above)
5.3. Stem the tide of democracy backsliding towards authortitarianism ( can’t say anything)
5.4. Public-private partenrship is required to compensate the labour strata of global societies (can’t say )
5.5. Digitalisation is the need of the hour to reform the health sector ( digitalization, globalisation, Covid)

6. Conclusion
Sorry Ii didn’t feel that its a conclusion.

My remarks: i expressed my own views which are subjected to amendment and cannot be taken as absolutely correct.
1. Try to write it in simple, connected and well-organised way.
2. topic interpretation is not done clearly. Globalisation means free movement of people, good, ideas,
Interdependence, cultural integration, better facilities , science and techinlogy, combined efforts
On global issues like poverty, crime, health.. etc. instead of blame-game like Chinese virus, nationalism, rumours, false propaganda, questioning the credibility of institutions etc.
3. No clear stance was observed.
4. Lack of diversity is observed like social, political, economic, administrative aspects and mostly
Revolved around vaccination.
5. Importantly, one cannot judge a book by its cover. So, you might have well-justified the topic in the essay but the outline, introduction and conclusion part is, in my opinion, not up to the mark.

There's no rule of thumb to get word by word with the topic. The title generally reflects divisiveness created by pandemic on globalised efforts. If i have written 'been impacted' doesn't mean I've got to write ' triggered an end'. I mean if one used impact or affect in place of trigger, it won't cause any bad impact on the attempt, that's what I think. Second, income inequality is a part of globalisation so it was adversely impacted by covid. Supply chain disruption though happend number of times, it was the hit the most this time. In a nutshell, nobody can think or write that globalisation has ended. Did you want me to discard this subheading? It seems you wanna go word to word with the title that demands the writer to prove that globalisation has ended. It seems impossible. Would anyone dare to prove that globalisation has ended? It can never end, even a naive couldn't think like that. In the blueprint heading, there's a difference between first and second subheading. In the first one, we should first save lives which is always preceded by economic interests, and which will not reflect organisational economic interests that is quite antithetical to globalised efforts. In the second subheading, vulnerable people should be hand in hand during vaccination drive. So there's a clear difference between first and second subheading. It won't cause anyone bad result either he writes wayforward (which is a conventional word) or blueprint, which is quite used in official policy documents. Lastly, I think diversity is clearly there ( health (vaccination drive), economy (income inequality and supply chain), political (nationalism).

I really appreciate your feedback and will try to amend some points.

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Impacted and triggered are different words, and I mentioned to let you know what relevancy is. Income inequality can be checked whether it is a reversible or irreversible phenomenon when COVID will be contained.
There is also a difference between "triggered an end to globalisation" and "globalisation has ended" as you have interpreted. Where have I mentioned that globalisation exists no more? How can you substantiate saving lives and vaccination with the second part which is " triggered an end to globalisation." I mention "way forward" a simple word because point 4 is in contradiction with point 3. Also, point 4 and 5 are more or less pretty much same which is globalisation.
what is the thesis statement?
what is your stance?
Read it even number of times, I can't say what you want to say.
if diversity is there, why are you not mentioning it different points?

Can you please differ between trigger an end and ended coupled with triggered and impacted? Also, please let me know how income inequality has affected as I'm unable to differentiate between these terms. Thankyou

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