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میں نے یہ نظم "جوش" ۳۰ اکتوبر ۲۰۱۱ کو عمران خان کے جلسے کے بعد لکھی۔۔۔۔میں واضح کرتی چلوں کہ میں عمران خان کی پارٹی کا حصہ نہیں ہوں مگر میں تبدیلی کا حصہ ضرور ہوں۔۔


جوش
ٹھاٹھیں مارتے ہؤے جذبوں کا جوش
ہاتھوں سے ہاتھ ملاءے
اک کڑی زنجیر بناءے
عشاق کے قافلے
اک سمت
بڑہھے جا ریے تھے
جوش کہ!
ہر رکاوٹ کے تیشے کو پگھلا دے
جوش کہ
رگوں میں مچلتے ہوءے خون کو گرما دے
جوش کہ
وللہ جس کی مثال نہ تھی
جوش کہ
بھیڑیوں میں جسکو سہنے کی تاب نہ تھی
جوش کہ
ظلمت کے کوہ گراں کو ہلا دے
جوش کہ
سؤے ہؤے ضمیروں کو جگا دے
جوش کہ
روٹی، کپڑا اور مکاں بھی بھلا دے
جوش کہ
آنے والی تبدیلی کا پتا دے
یہ جوش کا ہی فسوں تھا کہ
ظلمت کی چکی میں پستے ہؤے جواں
ظالم کو للکار رہے تھے
آگ میں لپٹے ہؤے وجود
اپنی تپش سے کربل کو گرما رہے تھے
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جنکے کاندھوں پر تھے ہاوی کب سے
وہ وجود آج فاتح عالم تھے
خودی کے سرنہاں تھے
اک ابھرتے ہؤے پاکستان کے پاسبان تھے

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But Farah is right kuch ryhtem garh barh hai
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حوصلہ افزائ کا بہت شکریہ ۔ بندی فرصت میں شاعری کی تکنیکوں کا مطالعہ کرے گی اور اپنی خامیوں کو درست بھی ۔

آزاد نظم کے بارے میں آپ کا کیا خیال ہے ؟ عام طور پر یہی کہا جاتا ہے کہ اس میں بحر ،وزن کی بندش نہیں ہوتی لیکن میرے مطالعے اور کچھ اہل ذوق کے مطا بق اس میں بھی وزن کا خیال رکھنا پڑتا ہے ،قافیہ ردیف کی بندش نہیں ہوتی ۔ ۔
میں آپ کی راۓ جاننا چاہتی ہوں ۔ دراصل مجھے آزاد نظم میں بے حد دلچسپی ہے اور میرے پاس موضوعات بھی متنوع ہوتے ہیں ۔مسئلہ وزن کا ہے ۔ ۔

Salam ,
sahee kaha apne azad nazm k baare mein.

Azad nazm mein...."azaadi" ke saath saath "nazm" bhee barqarar rakhna padta hai. Yeh "nazm" hee usmein ek rhythm, aur ek "sautee" kashih le aata hai.
Jab baat do misron mein wazahat ke saath na kahi ja sake , to azad nazm kee taraf tawajjoh kee ja saktee hai. Azad nazm ke liye chunke koee bandhe taake usool nahin hain,lehaza mashq ke saath isme chamak paida hotee hai. Baaz azad nazmein ek derpa asar chortee hain quaree kzehn per.

Jab baat do misron mein kahee ja sake...tab bhee azad nazm mein kaheee gayee baat ek inferadiyat rakh saktee hai.

Baaz log ashaar theek tarah se nahin padh paate...koee na kooe additional lafz masaalan "k" waghairah beech mein laga detein hain...aur unhein bura bhee nahin lagta....halanka unmein ashaar ko samajhne ka ek sha-oor hota hai magar bahr se be-bahra hotein hain kisi hud tak....

Aise logon ko k liye azad nazm jai panah ho saktee...takhleeq bhee hogee aur bandish se kisi had tak azaadee bhee.

Iska yeh matlab nahin k her azad nazm likhne wala aisa hee hota hai...ilme urooz se pooori tarah waquif log bhee azad nazm likhte hein.
Mesal k taur per Kaifi Azmi...Parveen Shakir....

Wassalam
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میری یہ آزاد نظم عورت کے نام۔۔۔۔میرے نام۔

دل کے کورے کاغذ پر
سوچتی ہوں کوئ نام لکھوں
اک دلبر سا پیغام لکھوں
لیکن ایک خیال آیا
نام لکھوں تو کس کا لکھوں؟
اس فریبی کا
جو محبت کو جال سمجھ کر
اور مجھے مچھلی
اپنی ہوس کے بادبان پر
میرے پھسل جانے کا منتظر ہے
یا پھر اس کا
جو محبت کو روح نہیں جسم سمجھتا ہو
لذتوں کے ترازو میں
جزبوں کو تولتا ہو
یا پھر اس کا
جو راہ چلتے ھوءے میرے وجود کے نہاں خانوں میں
نجانے کیا تلاشتا ہے
جسکو اپنی عزت تو محفوظ چاہیے مگر
دوسروں کی عزت اسکے لیے اک تماشا ہے
قلم تھام کر میں کچھ رقم کرنے ہی والی تھی کہ
میرے دل کا کاغذ
ٹکرے ٹکرے ہو کر
ہوا میں بکھر گیا
ان ٹکروں س ایک ٹکرا
میرے پاس آیا اور بولا
اس ہونے سے
اس لکھنے سے
اچھا ہے کہ
میں دھندلکوں میں کھو جاؤں
کیونکہ
ذرہ ذرہ سلگنے سے
اک بار بکھرنا بہتر ہے
اک بار بکھرنا بہتر ہے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔

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میری یہ آزاد نظم عورت کے نام۔۔۔۔میرے نام۔

دل کے کورے کاغذ پر
سوچتی ہوں کوئ نام لکھوں
اک دلبر سا پیغام لکھوں
لیکن ایک خیال آیا
نام لکھوں تو کس کا لکھوں؟
اس فریبی کا
جو محبت کو جال سمجھ کر
اور مجھے مچھلی
اپنی ہوس کے بادبان پر
میرے پھسل جانے کا منتظر ہے
یا پھر اس کا
جو محبت کو روح نہیں جسم سمجھتا ہو
لذتوں کے ترازو میں
جزبوں کو تولتا ہو
یا پھر اس کا
جو راہ چلتے ھوءے میرے وجود کے نہاں خانوں میں
نجانے کیا تلاشتا ہے
جسکو اپنی عزت تو محفوظ چاہیے مگر
دوسروں کی عزت اسکے لیے اک تماشا ہے
قلم تھام کر میں کچھ رقم کرنے ہی والی تھی کہ
میرے دل کا کاغذ
ٹکرے ٹکرے ہو کر
ہوا میں بکھر گیا
ان ٹکروں س ایک ٹکرا
میرے پاس آیا اور بولا
اس ہونے سے
اس لکھنے سے
اچھا ہے کہ
میں دھندلکوں میں کھو جاؤں
کیونکہ
ذرہ ذرہ سلگنے سے
اک بار بکھرنا بہتر ہے
اک بار بکھرنا بہتر ہے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔

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بہت خوبصورت ۔ ۔میں نہیں جانتی یہ شاعری کے مروجہ پیمانے پر پوری اترتی ہے یا نہیں لیکن میری نظر میں ہر وہ چیز شاعری ہے جو نثر نہیں ۔ جس میں ردھم پایا جاتا ہو ۔ ۔

مضمون تو تلخ سچائ پر مبنی ہے ۔ ۔ ۔پیشکش نے اسے اور بھی خوبصورت بنا دیا ہے ۔ ۔

ذرہ ذرہ سلگنے سے

اک بار بکھرنا بہتر ہے

اک بار بکھرنا بہتر ہے

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aj bhi tery nam pay sansain tham si jati hain
Aj bhi tera khayal
meray wajood, meri hasti
k qaid khanoon main muqayad
un bosida lamhon ki yadon ko
meri ankhon k dereechay main
meri palkon k say main
meri betab dharkan main
meri pur shor sanson main
meri be khwawab raton main
meri pur dard subhon main
mere tapkte anso main
meri pur soz khamoshi main
meri shikst pai main
aik malal
aik rog
ki sorat main
ayan krta he
aj bhi main dasth pai sehra nawardi k
shikst basta safr per
teri yadon k neshanon ko
khojnae niklti hon
aj bhi main un umeedon k jal main qaid hoon
k jin main tm se milne ka koi khwab chupa he
tou suno ae sitm gar mere !
mue apni yadon khayalon r umeedon se
Azad kr dalo
k main
sulgta howa koila hon
tum muje rakh kr dalo !

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I write these lines just now in so much pain and agony with my eyes full of tears. I don't know what i did but i feel like God is angry with me. all this pain and suffering is endless i asked for mercy , i asked for forgiveness but he is not listening.


Jinhan da Rub ruth janda
Unhan da Sukh lut janda
Us Rab da Sharik kisay noun na Bnain
Kakhan di kulli wang sb udh janda
Rab Sachay nal Lou la lay Bndya
Sb Dukhan noun Dawa Mil janda
Raba mery Mainoo maf Krin
Tery Khazny wichoon Kujh nai janda
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Jo RuLatay Hain Wo E HAsAtAy HIAn,
Firaq or Wisil Ishq ko berhatay Hain.

Rumi Ki Shayery ShamS TabReeZ nay Likhy,
Ap Nay KaB likHy? Wo likhwatay hain.

Jo RuLatay Hain Wo E HAsAtAy HIAn,
Firaq or Wisil Ishq ko berhatay Hain.

Hum Tu Dua Kerty Hain RoNay Ki,
Ye ANSu b tu LamAkAn say Atay HaIn.

Jisay Tu dhoodh rahy Hai Ratoon Main,
Wo Tu Hai, wo tujh Main Basa kertay Hain.

Jo RuLatay Hain Wo E HAsAtAy HIAn,
Firaq or Wisil Ishq ko berhatay Hain.

nivrat or sadgi Ishq Ka Hisa hai,
Ansu Ankh Main Ajaye, Mehboob chly atay AHin,

Mussafir tu GunehGhar hai subh say berha,
Bus, Bukhshanay Walay Bukhshwatay hain.

Jo RuLatay Hain Wo E HAsAtAy HIAn,
Firaq or Wisil Ishq ko berhatay Hain.


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اس خوف سے کہ میں کہیں پھر سے نہ جی اٹھوں
کھولی نہیں کسی نے میرے کفن کی گرھیں


My Own...

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اس خوف سے کہ میں کہیں پھر سے نہ جی اٹھوں
کھولی نہیں کسی نے میرے کفن کی گرھیں


my own...

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میرے عزیز ! گرچہ کوشش اچھی ہے مگر پہلا مصرع اور دوسرا مصرع وزن میں برابر نہیں ہیں۔ نظر ِ ثانی کی ضرورت ہے۔
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