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Shukriya Farah, May koshish karta hoon kay meri Khamiyan door ho jayn.
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Pukhtoon loves fighting but hates to be a soldier, Loves music but has a great contempt for musician, He is kind and gentle but hates to show it, Loves his new rifle and his old wife, hot-blooded and hot-headed and poor and proud with strange principles, Might be a loving friend or a deadly enemy. (Ghani Khan) |
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Love is my Shield,Truth is my Sword,Brain is my Crown,Smile is my Treasure and I'm a Queen; Quitters never win and Winners never quit..!!! |
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Arain007 (Saturday, November 05, 2011) |
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Farah,
Aaap ke yahan khayal aur rabt kee kamee nahin hai bazahir rythym bhee hai magR TAGHAZUL kam kam hai...aisa mujhe laga Agar main yeh kahoon k ilme urooz sikhye aur phir taba aazmaaee keejiye ..to goya main yeh kah raha hun k shairee chor deejiye kyunke..... main aisa bilkul nahi kah raha.... Meri guzarish yeh hai k shairi jaree rakhiye....bahr aur urooz kee jo thodee kami mujhe mahsoos ho rahee wo chalee jaygee inshaAllah. Isee ghazal ko aap dobaara likh saktee hain. Main yahan sirf aap kee ghazal ke matle kee taraf ishaara karoonga , baquee ashaar aap khud theek karein; woh shair kee ghazal thee woh jawan hoti fasal thee Yahan doosre misre mein ""woh" ka dohraya jana garaan guzar raha hai aur misre ko meter se bahar bhee kar raha hai. Agar aap iska istemal na karteen to behtar hota. Ab dobara padhein: wo shair kee ghazal thee jawan hotee fasal thee. Yeh behtar hai Wassalam |
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@Danish
impressed by the "gehrayi" and "pukhtagi" of your imagination But Farah is right kuch ryhtem garh barh hai |
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DANISH_KHAN (Tuesday, November 15, 2011) |
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"mujy zindagi se gila nahi
mery paas kuch b bacha nahi kisy doon sada mery hamnawa mera koi tery siwa nahi main hoon wehshatoon mein ghiri huwi mery sath koi wafa nahi abhi ankh mein ha ruka huwa wohi aik pal jo mera nahi " is ghazal ka MAqta bay-wazan hai so skip ker dia......i know is behar mein pehly b bht kuch likha gaya ha per ye mery lafz hein ....andar ki awaz impatiently waiting for suggestions,corrections and comments |
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Shooting Star (Saturday, November 12, 2011) |
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Achchee koshish hai. Wazan sab theek thak hain, misrey bhee connected hain. Is sher ko dekhein: maien hun washaton mein ghiree huee mere saath koee wafa nahin. Koee harj nahin, magar wafa kee jagah, SADA ya dua laga ker dekhieye. Wahshat mein sada ya dua kaam aatee hai wafa nahin... "wassalam |
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andleeb Akhter (Saturday, November 12, 2011) |
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پھر بھی آپ سے درخوست ہے کہ بحر اور وزن پہ کچھ پوسٹ کیجیے تا کہ میں سیکھ سکوں۔شکریہ
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Love is my Shield,Truth is my Sword,Brain is my Crown,Smile is my Treasure and I'm a Queen; Quitters never win and Winners never quit..!!! |
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Khud hee faisla na karein. Ilm urooz per app kee site per pahle hee se kafi kuch maujood hai ,mazeed likhne kee zaroorat nahin hai. Mera yeh manna hai ke ilme uurooz padh kar aadmi achcha naqid to bun sakta hai achcha shair ban-e yeh zarooree nahin hai.... Shairi ke liye ilme urooz se badh kar aur hat kar bhee kuch qudratee cheezein hain jo zarooree hain.Ilme urooz necssary to hai magar sufficient nahin hai. Jaise har Urdu jan-ne wala sukhan fahm ho yeh zarooree nahin hai.Maine aise be Ist class Urdu PG dekhein hain, jo ashaar ko appreciate karne kee salahiat nahin rakhte jab k aksar ek aam aadmi jo urdu qualified nahin hai, ashaar kee baareekee ko fauran bhanp leta hai. Bahar hal likhtee rahiye . Wassalam |
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آزاد نظم کے بارے میں آپ کا کیا خیال ہے ؟ عام طور پر یہی کہا جاتا ہے کہ اس میں بحر ،وزن کی بندش نہیں ہوتی لیکن میرے مطالعے اور کچھ اہل ذوق کے مطا بق اس میں بھی وزن کا خیال رکھنا پڑتا ہے ،قافیہ ردیف کی بندش نہیں ہوتی ۔ ۔ میں آپ کی راۓ جاننا چاہتی ہوں ۔ دراصل مجھے آزاد نظم میں بے حد دلچسپی ہے اور میرے پاس موضوعات بھی متنوع ہوتے ہیں ۔مسئلہ وزن کا ہے ۔ ۔
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