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Sweet are the uses of adversity


Adversity can be defined as misery, affliction, tragedy, hardship, difficulty and any unfavorable or critical situation of life. Adversity by nature is a great teacher. He who faces it enhances real experience of life and gets its zesty taste. There is mystery in misery which hides real lessons behind its thick curtains. A ship of life which sails smoothly in hardships, reaches the shore of success. He gets rubies who dives into depth of sea. Indeed, one who is difficult for difficulties gets its unlimited uses and everlasting lessons.

Thomas Edison was a newspaper seller and he was afraid of dark. He wanted to invent a bulb for his night phobia and for world. He tried almost one thousand times to invent a light bulb but remained unsuccessful. He did not give up and surrender; his all tries were unsuccessful except one. Each try gave him strength and eager unto success. His labor bore fruit; his struggle made him succeed and took him towards peaks of victories. When he was asked about his failures, he replied: "I didn't fail 1,000 times. I found 1,000 ways how not to create a light bulb." Indeed, Thomas Edison got sweet uses of adversity and success.

Undoubtedly, difficulties teach us the things which none can teach in this world. They make us aware, experienced, passionate, strong and humanitarian. Life is a process of learning and one learns a lot from hardships. Difficulty is the basic and fundamental part of experience. One should take and face difficulty as a black cloud of rain, which rains extremely but fertilizes all barren grounds.




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An empty vessel is a person with little knowledge and who presents himself as a scholar. Such people make claims which seem far beyond reality. They deliver their ideas infornt of people like themselves and receive appreciation. This habit also accompanies them in front of knowledgable and veteran people. These empty vessels are inferiority complex concious people and just want to avail the attention of masses. Interview is the common example where intelligent and wise candidates just remain stick to the answer of question and deliver comprehensive and to the point answers of the questions but some candidates having little knowledge consider themselves smart enough and think they can dodge the veteran and qualified interviewers by beating the bush. Same is the case with politicians. Seasoned and experianced politicians convey their point of view after evaluating the pros and cons of the matter , furnish their views or stance with logic and stand firmly on their stance. In contrast to them, ignorant politicians present their point of view without any research and don't support their stance with logic. They also don't leave any stone unturned to prove their illogic point of view right/correct.

Humility is hallmark of great men. A knowlegable person always remains concious of masses' expectations and knows very well what he does not know. (Try not to use short form like don't in place of do not in formal English writing especially in exams) On the other hand, empty vessels never try to read between the lines and always remain oblivian of what they do not know. They forget the reality that knowlege is ocean and nobody can drink its whole water.
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Adversity can be defined as misery, affliction, tragedy, hardship, difficulty and any unfavorable or critical situation of life
Adversity can be defined as misery, affliction, tragedy, hardship, difficulty, or any unfavorable or critical(X) situation of life.

A critical situation isn't necessarily an adverse one.

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He who faces it and enhances real experience of life he gets its zesty taste.
Enhances real experience of life? That doesn't make any sense in the context.
Also, no 'he' before gets. It is implied because of the preceding subordinate clause.

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One should take and face difficulty as a black cloud of rain, which rains extremely but fertilizes all barren grounds.
No comma.

By the way, don't take the '1001' literally. I think what Edison meant was he worked hard and eventually it all paid. The '1001' number is a hyperbole

One more thing and I don't know whether this applies to CSS or not, but in writing, it is poor practice to write gender specific pronouns when meaning both genders. Like you used 'he' 9 times, when you could have used 'one'. You should confirm this from a CSP or some CSS teacher.
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How and which were well knitted words?

Following are some of the words/sentences beautifully knitted together:
(These really make nice and rhythmic flow while reading!)

"Birds get frozen, flowers get withered, from a pebble of earth to the star of sky all get silenced. It is the time when winter jumps in. Torments, tensions, tragedies, tortures come up when west wind of winter blows."

"However, when spring comes it brings gala days; birds fly up, and flowers get bloomed."

"Winter snatches green leaves of trees, smashes colours of butterflies, slaughter blooming flowers."
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Adversity can be defined as misery, affliction, tragedy, hardship, difficulty, or any unfavorable or critical(X) situation of life.

A critical situation isn't necessarily an adverse one.


Enhances real experience of life? That doesn't make any sense in the context.
Also, no 'he' before gets. It is implied because of the preceding subordinate clause.


No comma.

By the way, don't take the '1001' literally. I think what Edison meant was he worked hard and eventually it all paid. The '1001' number is a hyperbole

One more thing and I don't know whether this applies to CSS or not, but in writing, it is poor practice to write gender specific pronouns when meaning both genders. Like you used 'he' 9 times, when you could have used 'one'. You should confirm this from a CSP or some CSS teacher.
Thanks Dear. Which 9(He) are you talking about??
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Following are some of the words/sentences beautifully knitted together:
(These really make nice and rhythmic flow while reading!)

Birds get frozen, flowers get withered, from a pebble of earth to the star of sky all get silenced. It is the time when winter jumps in. Torments, tensions, tragedies, tortures come up when west wind of winter blows.

However, when spring comes it brings gala days; birds fly up, and flowers get bloomed.

Winter snatches green leaves of trees, smashes colours of butterflies, slaughter blooming flowers.
Thanks, But, Chemguy says to avoid.

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Thanks, But, Chemguy says to avoid.

What should I do, Dear?
I think Chemguy is referring to the repeated use of the word 'He' in place of 'One'. Although, 'one' is used for both genders (he/she) but it is also not wrong to use the word 'he' when we discuss something in general context. For example:

Man is mortal. He is to die sooner or later.

In above sentence, we have used the pronoun 'He' for the noun 'man' which is referring to human beings of both genders including every man and woman.

(You may also consult some good english teacher for further clarification on this.)
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I think Chemguy is referring to the repeated use of the word 'He' in place of 'One'. Although, 'one' is used for both genders (he/she) but it is also not wrong to use the word 'he' when we discuss something in general context. For example:

Man is mortal. He is to die sooner or later.

In above sentence, we have used the pronoun 'He' for the noun 'man' which is referring to human beings of both genders including every man and woman.
Thanks, But I talked about those knitted words. Scroll back to know.
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An empty vessel makes much noise.

A pitcher which is empty makes loud noise and a pitcher which is full of water makes little noise. One can know by this example that a person who possesses little knowledge, makes loud noise and boasts about bushes. Whereas, the person who has deep knowledge remains silent and talks little. The deeper the ocean the more silent it will be.

God likes those people who are gold but call themselves copper coins. Having everything, they spend their lives like a common man. All messengers, prophets, sufis, dervishes and pious people had great knowledge but they never became empty vessels. They spent their lives with simplicity.

It is truely said that little knowledge is dangerous. Those people who have little knowledge, they try to be philosophers and scholars. They remain empty inside like drums. When they are hit, they make cracking sound. They do not look before they leap and they get little respect in their surroundings. A person who has deep knowledge speaks little and is respected by everyone. Indeed, brevity is the soul of wit.

All the philosophers and scholars talked rarely about their deep knowledge. On account of those who know do not tell and those who tell do not know. A person must not be like empty vessel. He should have deep and profound knowledge because those who speak much about the subject having little knowledge are not liked.
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Thanks, But I talked about those knitted words. Scroll back to know.
Done as directed sir But I haven't found any thing regarding avoidance of well knitted words in Chemguy's post.
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