Let their be more light in the corridors of worship places
1-Introduction
2-Religion-What is its purpose?
3-Role of religious institutions-Current scenario.
4-Causes of religious bigotry.
1. Ignorance
2. Selective/Incomplete knowledge
3. Absence of inter-faith discussions/dialogues
4. Ethnocentric and radical approaches of religious institutions
5. Stringent religious clergies
5-Contemporary era of globalization and need for religious harmony
6-Let the worship places be:
1. Inclusive
2. Open for discussions and questioning
3. Emphasizing pluralism
4. Celebrating religious similarities
5. Countering xenophobia
6. Negating extremism, intolerance and discrimination
7. Conclusion.

Can anyone dissect this one. I will appreciate your suggestions.

First, good attempt. Keep it up!
Second, you have completely missed "the topic." I cannot comprehend your stance about the topic from the outline.
The statement says, "let there be more light..." What u think about it is unclear.
Third, causes seem unrelated.
Fourth, heading #6 seems to make point and convincing. But, should be added somewhere between middle or top.
Fifth, use "ABC" or "Roman numerals" or anyother format to represent "sub-headings." They should be clear to catch eye.
Don't use "/" or alternate words. Be direct in your outline. What u state in the outline should always be clear.
Plus, u can simply write heading #2 as: purpose of religion. This would be clear and concise too.
Keep it up!
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Hope this helps!
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Assalamoalaikum saba...!

I hope this email will find you in a good health, Saba you are doing a very good job on Css Forum for aspirants and may ALLAH give you a higher place in every step of life, Aameen.

Dear sis, kindly help me regarding CSS preparation, as I can not join any academy just because of some personal issues and want to prepare myself at home. Can u share notes of some subjects (compulsory+optional) so that I can start my preparation in a proper manner?

Thanking you in advance.

I thought to reply as members of the thread seem inactive.

Dear sister,
U can ask for any help here in this thread about essays. For other stuff refer to respective thread or start a new one.
Glad u r doing on your own. Touche!

Second, I get it not everyone can join a institution, but don't rely on academic or anyother person's notes. Notes r nothing but pointers for personal understanding & rememberance. They won't help u as far as concept clarity is concerned.

Start your preparation with good books. Books are what that let you be yourself and make a difference. You don't need notes of any kind. Fpsc has perpetually raised such a point.
Hope it helps. U can ask for help and any clarity about topic any kind.

P.S. for God sake "All Aspirants" (emphasis added) are requested to get out of ready-made notes mindset. "Success requires efforts" do it & InshaAllah u will get it.
Not pointed at any specific person. It's general.

You have done a pretty good job handling this topic. The outline is concise but thorough enough to cover the various facets.

I agree with you that democracy could not directly do anything about debts and deficits but it does have a lot of influence in the economic sphere. You have taken a very macroeconomic view but the impact of democracy has very real and tangible manifestations in our own daily lives at a micro-economic level.

Hence I would like to suggest some more economic evils that can be "cured" with a more widespread application of democratic principles; End of Fraud and Exploitation, Promotion of equitable and sustainable development, Reduces gaps between the classes(as more democracy=more opportunities for the lower classes to better themselves), Nurtures entrepreneurial inclination and promotes innovation etc etc

An introduction of "Is democracy a panacea for all political and economic problems"

Democracy, as the term itself refers to the rule of people. It is a system in which every citizen has a say in the affairs of the state. Democracy in its true sense, is a panacea for all political and economic problems. Many states have concocted the true form of democracy and invented their own version of democracy. In west, there are groups which ardently support democracy, but they themselves are unaware of the very basic norms of democracy. In Pakistan, it is in its initial stages, but even then there are clear evidences of manipulation of judiciary and government.

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Thanks @Aishaalam for concise and positive reviews.
For future criticism is appreciated

Hello! Here are my thoughts on your introduction; you've made some very valid points but as a whole the paragraph is disjointed. Your sentences must logically flow from one to the next. Furthermore it has no "hook". A good introduction should start with a hook which esentially is something that draws the reader in. Now many people will argue over what kind of hook such a topic needs but I always prefer mine in a narrative tone-set a scene. Also always use the inverted pyramid approad-go from a broad concept and then whittle it down slowly, but logically, to the topic at hand. I'll exaplain with an example below.

From times immemorial mankind has been plagued by evils-often of his own creation. On a search for a panacea for these, he has experimented with elixer after elixer, has given tooth and limb, but has always come up short. Maybe the answer to these ever-present and ever-menacing evils is not in some mythical drug or fantastical creation. Maybe the answer all along lies in a concept man has taken for granted for generations. Maybe the panacea for all his economic and political evils was Democracy after all.

Democracy-a term heavily loaded with politically charged and historically muddled connotations but in essense it is exactly what mankind require to solve their problems. At it's heart, democarcy is a term that embodies the will of the people. It not only gives the common man a voice and a platform but also gives him the right to chose. Democracy can take many forms but as long as it stays true to its core principle, it is invaluable...

Now the above paragraph might not be to everyone's taste. People might say it is too informal. But the thing is you need to find your own voice while writing. A written piece must MAKE the other person want to read further rather than just skim over it.

Make it interesting-some people load it with facts and figures which you can also do but you could also chose a narrative/story telling style. Here if you will notice I have set a scene(this was my hook)-I have given the topic some context before diving into what everything means. I have also used the inverted pyramid: all evils/problems mankind faces (very broad topic) > quest for solution to all of them (still broad) > democracy might be the cure (fairly broad but getting to the point) > democracy cure to political and economic evils (topic at hand) > what is democracy (further breaking down the topic)

I hope this helped. You had some amazing points just need to work on stringig them together. If you will notice I have used most of the points you have made but have sequenced them. Anyway if you have any questions feel free to ask, I'd be happy to help.